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The chart below gives information about Southland\'s main exports in 2000, *20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about Southland\'s main exports in 2000, *20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart reveals the three main funds (international tourism,
dairy
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products
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, and
meat
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products
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) for the Southland in billions. Generally speaking, international tourism had the highest export in 2025, and
dairy
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products
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 had the highest in 20..,
while
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meat
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products
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 had the lowest, and each decision was made
accordingly
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. In 2000, international tourism had the highest
income
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 of 8
billion
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,
while
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dairy
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products
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 were slightly less, with one
billion
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 different. The
meat
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products
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 had the lowest
income
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 of 6
billion
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. In 20.., international had the
income
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 of 9
billion
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.
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,
meat
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products
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 were less than double that of
dairy
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products
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. In 2025, touriam and
dairy
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products
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 had almost the same
income
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.
While
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 the
meat
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 product was four
billion
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 behind.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dairy, products, meat, income, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • trends
  • projections
  • comparisons
  • dairy products
  • meat products
  • international tourism
  • significant growth
  • decline
  • export values
  • overview
  • highlight
  • sectors
  • future projections
  • data analysis
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