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The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates the proportion of
journeys
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 made by various transportation in
four
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countries
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, and the given bar chart shows the outcomes of
utilizing
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utilising
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 cars in
Canada
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.
Overall
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,
journeys
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 made by car accounted for the highest proportion among the
four
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countries
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.
On the contrary
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,
journeys
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 made by other vehicles led to the lowest percentage among the
four
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countries
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.
Besides
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, no alternative use in
Canada
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 had the highest amounts among the five categories,
while
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 the work nightshift caused the minimum.
Journeys
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 made by car accounted for 90% in
Canada
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, followed by Belgium 72%, Germany 68% and
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 47%.
However
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,
journeys
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 made by bicycle had a reverse trend, which made
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 have the highest proportion, 26% among the
four
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countries
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. And
Canada
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 only had 1% travelled by bicycle. From the bar chart, most people in
Canada
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 used their cars
due to
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 no alternative, which was about 38%, followed by needing
for
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to
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 work 30%. The category of quicker and
work
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working
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 nightshift only had a negligible number, around 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words journeys, four, countries, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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