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There have been many inventions in human history, such as the wheel. Some people think the most important thing is the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There have been many
inventions
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 in human history,
such
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 as the wheel. Some
people
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 think the most important invention is the
Internet
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. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Humanity has created many
creation
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creations
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 that have changed the world , from the wheel to electricity. Some
people
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 believe the
Internet
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 is the most important invention in history. I mostly agree with
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 idea
but
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 other
inventions
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 were
also
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 very important for human development.
Firstly
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, the
internet
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 has changed the way
people
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 communicate and learn. In the past, it was necessary to go to libraries or attend classes to get information. Today , we can easily search for knowledge online and learn almost anything from home. Students ,
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, often use online platforms to watch lessons, do research, and communicate with teachers.
Also
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, the
internet
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 helps
people
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 stay in touch with friends and family who live far away through video calls and messaging apps. But
on the other hand
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,
i
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I
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 think if the wheel ,
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, hadn't been invented, humanity would never have seen something like the
internet
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. Each of the big
inventions
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 helps to create a new one. We should remember that
inventions
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 like electricity made the
internet
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 possible, so they are
also
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 very important.
However
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, it's hard to pick one creation which will be the most valuable in our lives. In my opinion, maybe we still don't have something really huge which will change the lives of
people
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. In conclusion,
although
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 there have been many great
creation
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creations
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. I believe the
internet
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 is one of the most important because it has changed communication, education, and modern work

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task response
Be clear on your view from the start. Say if you fully or partly agree and keep this view to the end.
task response
Give 2 or 3 clear reasons with a simple example for each.
coherence cohesion
Use clear links between ideas. Use words like also, but, however, for example, in addition.
coherence cohesion
Make the paragraph that talks about other inventions easier to follow and link it to your main idea.
language use
Check grammar and spelling: I should be capital I, and the word Internet and other terms should be capitalized; fix punctuation.
direction
Your view on the Internet is clear and easy to see.
content
You show how the Internet can help learning and talking.
conclusion
There is an ending that sums up the idea.
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