Bar chart shows the top ten countries for consumption and production of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart compares the amount of electricity which was utilised and generated in ten different nations in 2014. The unit is

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kilo Wh

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kilowatt-hours

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, the country

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which made and used the largest amount of energy

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was China, followed by the USA.

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, South Korea ranked as the community

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where the least electricity was produced and consumed. In detail, the amount of generated and used electrical energy in the top two countries took the largest portion among others. Especially, those of China were over 5 trillion kWh in both sections,

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those of America were just over 3,500 billion kWh. In the case of Russia, the number of production was almost similar to that of consumption. Except for citizens of Germany, people from Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, and the Republic of Korea tended to generate more electricity rather than operating it.

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, Germany was the only country

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where the proportion of usage was over

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that of production, as the difference between of two figures was 55,900,000,000 kWh.

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Nov 1, 2025

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Bar chart shows the top ten countries for consumption and production of electricity in 2014.

Young people are increasingly choosing to eliminate meat from their diets and become vegetarians. Do you think this is a good idea? Does it bring more benefits or drawbacks?

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Some people believe that it is the best way to accept bad situations such as an unsatisfactory Job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to understand and improve such situations.