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Writing Samples
Band 4

The impact of technology on education advantages and disadvantages

The effects of technology
particularly
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, particularly
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 on
education
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education,
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 are various
,
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.
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 In
fact
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fact,
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 it has both positive and negative impacts.
For
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instance
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instance,
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 spending
unreasonable
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an unreasonable
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 amount of hours on the internet is extremely detrimental
in
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to
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 our health.
a
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A
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 good
illustrations
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 for
this
Linking Words
 is kids in today’s
world
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world,
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they
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who
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 are not getting engaged in physical activities and neglecting how essential it is to be more active. Despite the fact that the cons of technology
outweighs
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outweigh
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 the pros of
it
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it,
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 individuals are still spending their whole life on the internet.

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structure
Make a clear intro that states what you will talk about and a short ending.
structure
Divide the essay into two body parts: one for good side and one for bad side, with clear links.
language
Keep to one idea per sentence and use simple linking words.
content
Give one strong example for each point and show how it relates to learning.
content
You speak on both good and bad side.
example
You use an example about hours on the internet.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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