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Band 2.5

Some people prefer to live in hot climate while others love to live in countries with cold weather discuss both views and give your opinion

The lifestyles of
people
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 depend greatly on
climate
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the climate
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 these days.
some
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Some
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people
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 find it feasible to reside in tropical areas
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whereas
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, whereas
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 others prefer colder climates. I believe
tropical
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the tropical
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 region is more
favorable
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favourable
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 because it allows
people
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 to band easily.
People
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 tend to think
tropical
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a tropical
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 climate is favourable for travelling purposes as
is
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it is
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 not
any
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apply
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one
Place
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apply
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place to to
weathers
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weather
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people
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 can transport Prem/apother without any
octions
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issues
/if it
will allow
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allows
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 them to travel to places for work or picnics without any obstructions.
This
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 is because tropical climates have the availability of the things required.
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;
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,
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large
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a large
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 number of resort bookings are seen in
within
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apply
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a tropical city
of
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, of
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people
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 are seen to visit local areas more in tropical regions.
whereas
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, some
people
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 believe that colder climater are more kvousabte preferable because in colder regions their body their body is more they feel more productive. Their body feels less tired
and
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, and
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this
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 makes them motivated to do work.
As a result
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, the productivity rate of
siberian
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Siberian
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people
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 is
more
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higher
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 because they
doing
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do
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 tons of work
are
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and are
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 less tired even after. In conclusion,
although
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 a part of
people
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 love to reside in colder countries because their productivity
increases
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increases,
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 I believe tropical regions are better to live in as they offer accessibility in terms of transportation

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structure
Plan your answer first. Start with a clear view, then give two or three reason and end with a short finish.
coherence
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Use simple links like 'also', 'but', 'however' to connect ideas.
grammar
Use clear and small words. Check spelling and keep grammar simple.
content
Give real, simple examples that fit the idea. Use short, easy to read facts.
clarity
Be steady. Do not mix ideas in one part. Keep ideas in order.
content
The writer tries to discuss both sides and shows a view.
structure
There is a clear view on the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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