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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.
The table depicts the from where the
money
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 of
budget
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 of
police
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the police
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 of
UK
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the UK
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came
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apply
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for the following years of 2017 and 2018 in
unit
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units
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million
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of million
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, and the pie
chats
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charts
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 illustrate
the
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apply
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in
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apply
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where
are
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apply
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they
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the
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 spent.
Overall
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, the main source of
money
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 for
police
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the police
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 came from
national
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the national
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 government in both years and most of the
money
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spent
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was spent
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in
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on
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 salaries
purpose
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apply
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. In
2017
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2017,
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 the total amount for the
budget
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were
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was
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 304.7
million
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and
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, and
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 in 2018 it was increased from 304.7 to 318.6
million
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. Total three sectors contributed in the
budget
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 : national goverment, local taxes and other sources where local taxes contribution in second number and it provides 91.2
million
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money
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 in the
budget
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 in 2017 and 102.3
million
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 in 2018. Around 75%
money
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 was used in salary in the year of
2017
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2017,
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 where in 2018 it was slightly less than that. For building and transport same percentage
which
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, which
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 was 17%,
used
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was used
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 in the two years.
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Lastly
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 for
,
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 technology, in 2017 was allocated 8% and the following year it rose
in
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to
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 14%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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