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Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyone’s life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today's contemporary world
advertising
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, advertising
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 is everywhere - from television and billboards and mobile phones
and
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, and
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 all other smart
equipments
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equipment
.
While
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 some folks believe that advertising has a positive influence
in
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on
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 our
life
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lives
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providing
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, providing
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usefull
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useful
 information and supporting
economy
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the economy
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, others
argued
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argue
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 that sometimes it can negative
affect
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effect
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of
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on
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 product quality and
consumers
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consumer
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behaivours
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behaviour
.
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, advertising plays
major
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a major
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 role
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in the
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the
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an
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 organisation
which
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whose
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 budget is small. Small companies can increase
yearly
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their yearly
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 budget with
adverstise
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advertising
.
Moreover
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, advertisements inform people about new products, technologies,
disconts
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discounts
 which can
easly
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easily
affects
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affect
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 people's
life
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lives
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 and make it more comfortable.
In addition
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,
advertisement
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advertisements
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 create many jobs like market researchers, designers
and
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, and
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 media
contributes
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contribute
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economic
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to economic
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 growth.
For
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instance
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instance,
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 Coca-Cola invest
approximetly
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approximately
 30-40% of
his
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its
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 budget to the adverstisment.
On the other hand
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, advertising can affect
negatively
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apply
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individuals and society
.
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negatively.
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 Many companies use persuasive techniques to make
buy
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people buy
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 things that
not
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are not
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 really needed. It can lead
unexpected
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to unexpected
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result
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results
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of
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for
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health or life to
buy
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buying
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 dangerous products for teenagers or
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the elders
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elders
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elderly
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.
For example
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, buying sugary drinks like Redbull, Hell advertisement should be
assembled
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removed
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 from everywhere which
is
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as
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 very dangerous results can happen. In conclusion, advertising informs people and
support
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supports
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economy
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the economy
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. But it can
also
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encourge wastefull
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encourage wasteful
 and useless expectations. I
beleive
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believe
,
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apply
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 advertising is
benefical
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beneficial
but
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, but
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there need
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need
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needs
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 to be strict rules to protect our society from unexpected results.

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structure
Make a clear view at the end. Say your own view in the last line of the essay.
structure
Put ideas into clear groups. One paragraph for view A, one for view B, one for your own view.
language
Correct grammar and spelling. There are many mistakes that make it hard to read.
language
Use simple sentence form and simple words. Keep to subject-verb-object.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like but, also, for example, and therefore.
content
Give more clear examples and say how they support your point.
task
Keep a calm tone and do not rush to the end. Present your view clearly.
structure
The essay tries to talk about both sides.
content
Some real examples are used, like Coca-Cola and Red Bull.
language
A view is given in the end.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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