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The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed.

The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed.
The maps provided key information about the changes that have taken place in Paradise between the sea and the beach.
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, it is clear from the maps about the paradise has undergone substantial redevelopment, with several features either relocated or transformed.
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, the past layout showed a symmetrical design,
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 the current format shows a clear shift to a more functional and diversified
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 what is shown
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 in the past chat, it was centrally located on the Island between the Sea and the Beach , with three trees in the middle. It features a Natural spring, a scientific research station and rocks,
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 the pier and boat were situated on the opposite side. In terms of
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 the current format, the BBQ area has become the centre of the Island. The natural spring has been replaced by a Cafè.
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, the Scientific research station turned into a swimming pool and a hotel complex
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 Meanwhile, the boat has become a cruise ship.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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