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Writing Samples
Band 4

Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments againts offender? To what extent do you agree or dis agree? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. x

Crisapride might block the HERG potassium channel, as the authors proposed. The team wanted to find out why a gut motility drug had raised concern in clinical records of
long- Q-T
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 syndrome, torsades de pointes, and even deaths. At the time, the cellular mechanism wasn’t yet clear, but studies on rabbit Purkinje
fibers
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 had shown that crisapride could prolong the cardiac action potential and trigger early
after-depolarization
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. Together,
this
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 work pointed to
HERG
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the HERG
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 potassium channel as the likely site of action behind the drug’s cardiac effect.

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task response
Give a clear view on the topic in the opening. State if you agree or disagree, and say main reasons.
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Make a plan with three paragraphs: intro, two or three body paragraphs, close. Each body paragraph should have one main point with a reason and example.
coherence and cohesion
Join ideas with linking words so the writing feels smooth and easy to follow.
coherence
The text has some fact-based information that could be used.
task achievement
There are some details that show a real point of view.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enforcement of regulations
  • Deterrent effect
  • International cooperation
  • Legislative framework
  • Environmental degradation
  • Punitive measures
  • Awareness campaigns
  • Financial penalties
  • Compliance
  • Ecosystem preservation
  • Resource allocation
  • Sustainable practices
  • Political will
  • Community service
  • Innovative technology
  • Legal ramifications
  • Global commitment
  • Conservation efforts
  • Corporate accountability
  • Environmental stewardship
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