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While some people believe in allowing wealthy people use the space facilities to make a space journey, others firmly argue that this is not an entertaining matter. Discuss both these views and state your own opinion.

Crisapride might block the HERG potassium channel, as the authors proposed. The team wanted to find out why a gut motility drug had raised concern in clinical records of long-Q-T syndrome, torsades de pointes, and even deaths. At the time, the cellular mechanism wasn’t yet clear, but studies on rabbit Purkinje
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 had shown that crisapride could prolong the cardiac action potential and trigger early
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. Together,
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 work pointed to the HERG potassium channel as the likely site of action behind the drug’s cardiac effect.

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structure
Add a clear intro and a short end to show your view.
content
Give a main idea in each part and add at least one simple example.
linking
Use good linking words to show how ideas go with each other.
clarity
Keep the text short but clear, and give facts or a simple example to back each idea.
focus
The text keeps to one idea.
strength
It shows a science topic and uses exact terms.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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