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Writing Samples
Band 2

It is better for college students to live on campus than live at home with their parents. To what extent do you agree with this idea?

The team built the HERG gene inside a pCDNA3 vector and passed it into HEK293 cells with
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. Shortly, a single line that showed clear electrical signals was chosen after G-418 treatment, lifted with trypsin, and tested within hours. From here, the cells were placed under an inverted microscope in a buffered setup. There, membrane currents were noted in a whole-cell configuration by suction pipettes and read with a patch-clamp
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. It’s worth noting that crisapride of 99.8% purity was dissolved in pure ethanol to make 1 5mM
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, and the ethanol group at 0.01% had no effect on HERG current. Data were given as a mean ± SE, with significance tested by Student’s t-test and permutation analysis.

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overall
The piece does not answer a clear task. It reads like lab notes and not a real essay. Add a clear prompt and plan.
coherence
Use simple words to link ideas. Add words like first, next, also, but, so to show how ideas go from one to the next.
structure
Give a short start and a short end. Use a plan with one main idea and a simple end.
strength
It shows many lab steps and numbers.
strength
It uses real data and tests ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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