The pie charts below show the percentage of students on the one adult education center taking a various course offered in 1985 and this year.

The pie charts below show the percentage of students on the one adult education center taking a various course offered in 1985 and this year.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the percentage of students on the one adult education center taking a various course offered in 1985 and this year.
The pie charts show the different
courses
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that students took part in 1985 and now.
Overall
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, the percentage of students has not changed significantly until now.
While
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fitness and dance
courses
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show a similar proportion in both years, music lessons sustained IT . Regarding the lesson, modern languages
such
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as French, German and Spanish were dominant in 1985 at 24%. Cookery and history
courses
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were approximately the same at 14% and 15%. Notably, art was only 2% more than them at 17%.
However
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, physical activities were popular and held second place among others at 22%.
While
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all
courses
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demonstrated more than 10% , only music was 8% .
By contrast
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, now, fitness and dance
courses
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stay stable until
this
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year at 22%.
Although
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the percentage of cookery rises to 5% , art has declined to 2% at 19% and 15%. Music and local history participants change their
courses
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to IT.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words courses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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