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Band 4.5

Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to make people recycle more is to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

I
abusolutely
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absolutely
 agree that it is necessary to put recycling in
law
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 to help increase recycling rates. Only by doing so
,
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 can we
acheive
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achieve
 the ultimate goal of recycling. First of all, we can explore what the current circumstances are in countries that haven't
make
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made
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 recycling a
legistic
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legislative
 issue. China,
for instance
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, is a country that
haven't
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intruduced
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introduced
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law
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laws
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in
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on
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 recycling. Many useful materials
goes
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go
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 to
waste
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due to
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low
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the low
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 common sense of
the
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recycling
from
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among
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the
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citizens. A vast majority of people don't understand the concept of
garbage
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 sorting, which leads to the contamination of some valuable recyclable resources,
for example
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, paper, as I have seen in many
garbage
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 bins,
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which was
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was
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 put
together with
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waste
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 kitchen disposal,
which made
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making
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 it impossible to be recycled because it's soaked. When recycling issues
is
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 put in
law
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, clear
instuctions
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instructions
 on recycling
is
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are
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 bound to follow, which will make
garbage
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 sorting way
more
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easier for the public,
therefore
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 will decrease
waste
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 in useful resources. Meanwhile, in some countries that abide
with
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by
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 severe recycling
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law
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laws
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, like Japan,
thingsare
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things are
 going a lot better. There are no trash bins on the streets, because the
garbage
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need
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needs
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 to be taken back to the residency for proper sorting. You can not throw trash all you want
,
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 you have to sort your own
garbage
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 before throwing it out, and you must follow a strict timeslot for
garbage
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 collecting, and
garbage
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 must be put in the proper spot. If you fail to follow the rules, you may be faced with
fine
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a fine
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 or even
lawsuit
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a lawsuit
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.
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, the streets in Japan are extremely clean, as many
tourist
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tourists
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 suggest, "the cleanest place
in
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on
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 the planet", and people live their life with a relatively lower rate of
waste
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,
due to
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 all the trouble you have to go through when disposing of the packaging. As far as I am
conccerned
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concerned
, more countries should engage in making recycling laws to help make the planet more eco-friendly, sustainable and beautiful for generations to come.

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structure
Make the write more clear. Use one idea per paragraph and link with simple words.
content
Check facts. If you name places, keep facts true and fair.
cohesion
Use easy link words to show tone and flow, like 'also', 'but', 'for example'.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Watch mistakes like 'absolutly' and 'garbage item' and 'Japan' spacing.
task response
Add a short ending that restates your view.
stance
Clear view that laws help recycling.
content
Good use of examples to back idea.
analysis
Attempts a logical idea that laws can guide people.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycle
  • waste
  • law
  • rule
  • must
  • encourage
  • enforce
  • fine
  • penalty
  • incentive
  • education
  • awareness
  • habit
  • convenient
  • easy
  • system
  • cost
  • benefit
  • government
  • community
  • policy
  • compliance
  • participation
  • environment
  • dumping
  • campaign
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