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Some people argue that the use of animals in medical research for the benefit of humans is acceptable, while others believe that is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There has been a long-standing debate about
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animals
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medical
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 for the advantages of humans is approved,
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 think it is not.In
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with
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animals
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reaserching
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because
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solutions for everything they need
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medicale
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medical
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optin
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opt
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informations
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information
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companies
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BIODERMA,which is
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companies
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reaserching
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researching
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 the products before selling them to the
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public
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understandable
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conversely
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in
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 my point of view, I firmly agree with using
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medical
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. because of all the advantages of the
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medecines
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medicines
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grammar
Fix many grammar and spelling errors that make meaning hard to follow.
structure
Make a clear plan in the first paragraph: state the two sides and your view.
structure
Use a topic sentence at the start of each paragraph to show its main idea.
content
Add real or simple examples to support each point.
lexis
Choose simple, correct words and avoid long or wrong forms.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas connect from one part to the next.
structure
Finish with a short and clear conclusion that restates your view.
style
Keep sentences short and kind of simple to avoid errors.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides of the issue.
structure
There is a basic structure with introduction, body, and conclusion.
cohesion
Some linking phrases like on the one hand and in conclusion show cohesion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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