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Band 1

Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views and give your opinon.

It is argued that zoos are not
suitable
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a suitable
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 place for
animals
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 to live
because
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because,
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 naturally, it is not their habitat,
while
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 others argue that zoos
plays
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play
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vital
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a vital
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 role for entertainment purposes for
public
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the public
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as well as
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 have benefits for
environment
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the environment
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 two
school
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schools
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 of
thoughts
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thought
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 are true
according to
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thier
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their
 belief,
i
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I
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 agree with the latter view.
According to
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 animal activists that zoos are not suitable for
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animals
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animals'
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liveage
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living
, because
intrinsically
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apply
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animals
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' real home is obviously nature and they incline towards nature.Restricting freedom might cause
the
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apply
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negativity and
agression
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aggression
 in
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animals
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animals'
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 behaviour. Deprivation of
animals
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 from open natural
habiat
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habitat
 might result
constant
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in constant
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 irrelevant activities in
aniamls
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animals
 nature,

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structure
Plan your essay. Write a short intro, then two body parts, and a short end.
language
Use only simple words and short, clear sentences.
grammar
Fix big spelling mistakes and keep one idea in one line.
content
Give a clear example for each view.
task
Make your view clear at the end with a short line.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas fit together.
content
The essay shows two sides of the issue.
content
It keeps a clear view that the writer agrees with.
cohesion
There is some use of linking ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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