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The maps below depict the changes that museum has experienced from the year of 1990 to 2010. The main building of the museum is built close to a rectangular shape of garden and nearby a cottage area. Inside the building, you can find three main components and they are store, exhibition and shop. Right across the path are the parking lot and a garden that is about one third of the size of the parking lot.

The maps below depict the changes that museum has experienced from the year of 1990 to 2010. The main building of the museum is built close to a rectangular shape of garden and nearby a cottage area. Inside the building, you can find three main components and they are store, exhibition and shop. Right across the path are the parking lot and a garden that is about one third of the size of the parking lot.
The two charts illustrate the main changes that have taken place at a museum between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, the museum has been significantly developed over the period, showing a clear trend toward
modernization
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modernisation
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. The most notable change is the
reorganization
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 of car park areas and the addition of new leisure buildings. The most significant changes concern the visitor access. In 1990, the exit was located at the
west- south
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 edge, serving as the only entrance.
However
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, the exit in 2010 moved slightly south, across the footpath.
Moreover
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, the garden remained unchanged,
while
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 planting one more tree to create a green environment. Regarding the facilities, the
area
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 for recreation has undergone a major
reorganization
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. The store, originally located in the
north- west
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north-west
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, has been relocated to a larger section in the same
area
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. The former exhibition
area
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 has been relocated to a smaller section,
while
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 the shop has been constructed
to
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in
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 a larger
area
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.
In addition
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, the cottage has been demolished and
constructed
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replaced
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in
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with
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the
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a
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 coffee
area
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. By 2010,
The
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the
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 upper car park in 1990 remained unchanged,
while
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 the southern garden had been changed into the other car park.
Overall
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, the refurbishment demonstrates a clear shift from traditional museum functions towards modern residential and recreational facilities.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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