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The table below show the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public place for hiring over the period of three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below show the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public place for hiring over the period of three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table compares
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income
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the income
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 and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public place for hiring
over
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, over
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 a period of
three
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 years.
It is clear that
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 total incomes were the largest over the period of
three
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 years.
However
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, the profit was the lowest between
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year
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years
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 1 and
year
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three
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. In
year
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 2, 34,000 Euro of hiring room
income
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 was the most, and the
income
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 of the cafe in
year
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three
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 was the second most, with 4,000 Euro. Funding from other sources in
year
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three
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 was the most,
while
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Funding
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funding
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 from
local
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the local
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 council was the second most. The total
income
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 between
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year
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years
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 1 and
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year
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apply
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3 was the most.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, three, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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