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Art classes, such as painting and drawing, as important to child's development as other subjects, so it shopuld be compulsory in high school. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

There is a view that in high schools,
students
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 should have to study
art
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classes
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 because it helps a child’s
development
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 some people oppose
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 of it, as it not only benefits a child’s
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 but
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 has many advantages. On the one hand, there are many
reasons
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 why
art
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classes
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,
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 as painting and
drawing
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 should not be compulsory. First of all,
students
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 who are in high school are preparing for
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 to enter university. They have already decided on their major
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 spending time on other subjects can be a waste of time.
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, a student who wants to be a doctor has to
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focus on learning biology, chemistry and math.
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, for these
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, it is not beneficial to take
art
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classes
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 in high school.
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 there are several
reasons
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 why
art
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classes
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 should be mandatory in high school, one of the main
reasons
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 is
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that it helps a child’s
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, by drawing pictures, they can improve their creativity and critical thinking skills.
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,
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classes
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 are considered a type of therapy; they can help to relax, recharge and unwind.
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, if
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 take
art
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classes
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, they can relieve their stress and be more focused. In conclusion, I totally agree with
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 even though some people disagree with it.

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task response
Keep one clear view in the intro and stay with it all through the essay.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea and give a real example to support it.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go from one point to the next.
grammar
Check grammar and fix small errors. Use short, clear sentences.
structure
End with a strong last line that repeats your main view.
structure
The essay uses 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to show two views.
content
The writing uses real examples (doctor, therapy) to back ideas.
structure
The conclusion repeats the main idea.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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