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Band 3

THE ONLY WAY TO IMPROVE ROAD SAFETY IS TO GIVE MUCH STRICTER PUNISHMENTS ON DRIVING OFFENCES. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DİSAGREE?

The most effective method to make
roads
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 safer is to make the punishments
on
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 driving offences stricter. Even though some people definitely agree with the given
oppinion
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opinion
, others may absolutely disagree with it.
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on
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 why society could agree with
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 is that the stricter punishments will lower the motivation for reckless driving.
There for
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, when people know the causes for their actions, they might think twice before doing it.
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,
i
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belive
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believe
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 that if the penalty for
breking
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breaking
 the
roads
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 gets higher,
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 these reckless drivers, at some point, will not afford to pay them anymore,
there for
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 they will stay off the
roads
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.
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,
this
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 statement is not always true, because, by making the laws for breaking the rules stricter, it can reduce the accidents, but
is
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 is not the only way
on
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how
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to improve the safety. To illustrate, by spreading the awareness of the deaths and injuries that reckless driving has led to, drivers might take the advice more
privatley
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privately
,
hence
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, their attitude will
also
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 change. In conclusion,
while
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 making the punishment for reckless driving is
affective
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, because it
lovers
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lowers
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 the motivation to break the rules, it might not be the best way to
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achieve
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 safer
roads
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 and get the
drivers
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drivers'
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 attention on why exactly their driving habits need to be safer.

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language
Improve grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Correct common mistakes (oppinion -> opinion, There for -> Therefore), and check sentence endings.
structure
Make your thesis clear in the introduction and state your position unambiguously. Outline what you will discuss in the essay.
structure
Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence and stay on one main idea with support.
coherence
Use simple, correct linking words to connect ideas and avoid run-on sentences. Focus on logical flow from one idea to the next.
content
Give concrete, relevant examples and explain how they support your point. Avoid vague claims.
content
The writer sets up a debate by showing both sides.
structure
There is a basic essay structure (intro, body, conclusion).
coherence
Some connector words help the ideas flow.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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