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Writing Samples
Band 2

Nowadays, more and more people choose to do their shopping onlineinstead of going to physical stores. Why is this so? What are the disadvantages of this trend?

Nowadays,
The
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the
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phenomona
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phenomenon
which
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apply
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shows that
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that shows
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 more and more
people
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 choose to
shopping
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shop
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 online
instead
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 of going to physical stores
arouse
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 a debate. The reason should be that it is a convenient way to get things which they want.When
people
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shopping
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shop
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 online, they would not go out and save
the time and
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time and the
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 transition fee.
In addition
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, the
amount
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number
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 of things which sold online
are
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is
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 huge
so
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, so
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that
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apply
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people
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 would not worry about
that they wouldn't
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not
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get
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getting
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 the
thigs
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things
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 they want.What's more, the
expense
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expenses
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 are lower than
physcial
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physical
 stores because
of
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apply
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the rent for stores
are
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is
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canceled
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cancelled
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.
However
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,
If
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if
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this
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 trend
get
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gets
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 more popular, the result would be
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people
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that people
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 will prefer staying at home and lose the association with others.What's more, the experience of touching our
reality
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 life would decrease
which
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, which
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 would
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due
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be due
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 to the mental illness. In conclusion, it is important for
people
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 to try going outside and have a fantastic memory with friends or family to
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the physcial
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physcial
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physical
 store.

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structure
Make a plan before you write. Have a clear intro, two or three body points, and a short conclusion.
content
Add more detail for each point and explain the reason.
coherence
Use simple link words to tie ideas, such as but, so, and, because.
grammar
Check spelling and form of verbs, keep grammar steady.
examples
Use one or two clear examples to back each point.
task response
The essay tries to answer both parts of the question.
content
There is a main idea about saving time when you shop online.
structure
There are basic paragraph breaks in the text.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • convenience
  • physical stores
  • retail therapy
  • consumer behavior
  • digital interactions
  • price comparison
  • product range
  • internet penetration
  • online payment systems
  • delivery logistics
  • carbon footprint
  • expedited shipping
  • local businesses
  • retail sector
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