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Do you agree or disagree that Reading fiction is more enjoyable than watching movies?

I disagree that reading fiction is more entertaining and fun than watching
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 reading could be a great way to learn new things,
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movies
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 can trigger the visual and auditory sensations in the body, enabling one to feel the story
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 and blend with the characters. Films portray characters that exist in real life, crafting the scenes in
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 a fashion that
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 real life.
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, the emotional tuning capability with visuals ,
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 well-engineered audio , supplements films to a certain level, which books are unable to achieve.
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, the series called "Harry Potter" was made with
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 intricate VFX and audio designs that embedded long-lasting emotions into the audience's hearts. Films are
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 efficient and easy to grasp , as it does not require much effort , unlike traditional books. The convenience is the prime factor, rendering
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 into the most enjoyable leisure or passive activity. Specifically, anyone can amuse themselves with a movie
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 cooking, driving and even
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 eating, but the case with reading is totally different. Books are a good and detailed approach to
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 knowledge , but are certainly not the best for "fun" purposes.
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 are a great approach to gain knowledge and pleasure at the same time , as they utilise 2 senses at the same time. The flexibility of a film is the capability of incorporating realism with fiction, which is more pleasurable compared to reading fiction.

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Plan your essay with a clear plan: state your view, give two or three ideas, then a short end.
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development
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grammar
Check small grammar issues like spaces before punctuation and missing capitals.
cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like 'also', 'but', 'for example' to show flow.
strength
You show a clear view from the start.
example
You use a real example to back a point.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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