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Surveys show that many people believe most jobs in the future will be done at home.Do you agree or disagree ?

In recent years, remote
work
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 has become a growing trend, bringing both advantages and disadvantages.
Although
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 many people believe that most jobs in the future will be done from home, I disagree.
While
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 remote
work
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 will remain important, the hybrid model—combining office and home-based
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—will likely become the dominant form of employment. The main reason is that many professions still require face-to-face collaboration. Jobs in healthcare, education, and engineering demand in-person communication and teamwork that cannot be replaced by online meetings.
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, office
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 allows employees to build stronger relationships with colleagues and managers, which often leads to greater innovation and productivity.
On the other hand
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, remote
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 offers flexibility, saves commuting time, and reduces expenses for both employees and companies.
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, it
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 has drawbacks
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 as isolation, weaker cooperation, and unsuitable home environments. The hybrid model successfully balances these advantages and disadvantages by allowing employees to
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 remotely for part of the week
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 still maintaining professional interaction at the office. In conclusion,
while
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 remote
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 will continue to grow, I believe that most jobs will not be entirely home-based.
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, the hybrid model will become the most effective and sustainable working arrangement for the future.

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Add one strong counter view and show why the writer does not agree with it.
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Give more real and simple examples to back each point.
coherence cohesion
Use clear link words to show the move from one idea to the next.
coherence cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph and keep it clear.
coherence cohesion
Sum up the view in the end and restate the main point.
language
Check simple grammar and use common words only.
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The writer has a clear view and sticks to it.
coherence cohesion
The plan is easy to read: intro, body, and end.
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The writer looks at both sides and shows balance.
coherence cohesion
There are useful link words to join ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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