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The pie charts show the reasons for immigrants to a European country in 2009 and reasons for immigrants from a European country in 2009. Summize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the reasons for immigrants to a European country in 2009 and reasons for immigrants from a European country in 2009. Summize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the
reasons
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 for immigration and emigration to
European
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countries
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 in 2009.
Overall
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, what stands out from the charts is that the main
reasons
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 why people moved to
European
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countries
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 were family purposes and a definite
job
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 offer,
while
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 the causes of leaving were a permanent
job
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 and unspecified
reasons
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. In terms of the primary
reason
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 for immigration to
European
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countries
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 was accompanying, with 25%. The second
reason
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 was a definite
job
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, with 23%. Meanwhile, the percentage of people who went to
European
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countries
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 for studying, finding a
job
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 or unknown
reasons
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 was the same, with 15%. Only 7% of individuals immigrated to
European
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countries
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 for no
reason
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. When it comes to causes of emigration to
European
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countries
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, the largest proportion of people left
European
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countries
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 because of a definite
job
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 offer,
while
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 the smallest percentage of citizens emigrated from their homes
due to
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 studying purposes and without a
reason
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, with 7% and 4% respectively. More than a fifth of citizens left their homes for other purposes. The percentage of individuals who looked for a
job
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 or were accompanying was a bit similar, with 13% and 15% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, european, countries, job, reason with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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