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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsons where relevant.

The maps provided illustrate the transformation of an agricultural region -- Beechwood
Farm
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 -- from 1950 to today, highlighting some significant changes with newly added facilities and
also
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 the areas that remain untouched.
Overall
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, several buildings have been constructed on the lower part of the plan,
while
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 the upper part experienced a more considerable reconfiguring process. Starting with the farming areas nearby the river in the lower part of the map, which mainly stayed untouched during the 50 years, two houses is now built: a
farm
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 shop occupied a small area that was planting fruit trees previously, and a barn, moving from the orignal place of today's holiday cottages, is now connected with roads under the triangle region in the center of the map. All other features remained the same,
such
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 as the farmhouse, the areas planting soft fruits and vegetables, and
chicken
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the chicken
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farm
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. In comparison, the upper area shifted from a sheep
farm
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 to a few parking lots,
camping
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a camping
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 field, and
space
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a space
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 with solar panels. The former sheep
farm
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are
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is
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 now divided into two main parts, which are
camping
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a camping
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 field with trees planted on the left-hand side, and solar panels scattered on the right. Both of the places have a parking area
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besides
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beside
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 the road.

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task response
Use short and clear idea lines. Start with an opening line that says what the map shows. Then describe changes in two parts, lower and upper. End with a simple final idea.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like also, but, in addition. Use a topic sentence in each paragraph to show the change. Check tense and stay the same.
structure
The piece shows two part plan (lower and upper) which helps show changes.
content
There is a clear sense of change and basic comparison.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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