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Band 1

Nowadays more and more people are using smartphones and computers to communicate, so they are losing the ability to communicate with each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

In the era of
globalization
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, we cannot defy the
utilzation
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utilisation
 of technology, especially smartphones and computers. These devices have
been becoming
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 more and more
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indispensable
 as it is implicit in
the
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daily life. Because of the advancement of
inovations
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innovations
, people can access
the
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global communication even through their fingers.  I agree
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 some extent that it can affect the ability to
comunicate
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communicate
 with each other face to face because when people get used to
the
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online communication, they cannot
percieve
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perceive
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thier
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their
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such
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 as facial expressions. When those people must converse with somebody, they often undergo the inability to read the room since they cannot detect body
languages
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 during
an
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online chatting.

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task response
Plan your answer. Say your view in the first line and keep to it.
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Add one or two clear examples or facts to back your point.
coherence
Use simple link words such as first, then, but, so to show how ideas fit.
coherence
Put each main idea in its own short paragraph and use a clear order.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar to avoid easy mistakes.
content
You show the idea that tech can affect how we talk face to face.
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You note that online talk can make it hard to read body language.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instantaneous
  • Over-reliance
  • Digital communication
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Body language
  • Verbal communication
  • Social isolation
  • Physical social interactions
  • Sense of loneliness
  • Professional relationships
  • Personal relationships
  • Emotional connections
  • Networking
  • Building rapport
  • Counter-argument
  • Balanced communication
  • Enhanced social bonds
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