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Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, there
is
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are
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 a lot of things the
humens
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humans
 need to
life
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live
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 like education
transport
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, transport
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 and even food and
water
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. Some
peoplebelieve
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people believe
 it's
role the
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the role
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humanity
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of humanity
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 companies or even governments to supply
to
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apply
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water
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while
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, while
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 others think it's
charge
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the responsibility of
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 the people. In my point of view,
i
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I
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 see it should
charge
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be
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 free. On the one hand,
the
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apply
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access
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 to clean
water
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 is
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an importent
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importent
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important
 thing in
all
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apply
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the world
and
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, and
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 they need
water
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 especially clean
waterto
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water to
 use it.
For
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example
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example,
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 in poverty countries there is
a
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apply
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low
access
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 and hard to get clean
water
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although
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, although
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the
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apply
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water
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essential
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is essential
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 and that make us
live
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to live
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.
Water
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 gives us opportunities
to
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for
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 a lot of things
like
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, like
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 farming and eating what
were
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was
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 farmed .
On the other hand
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, the
water
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 which there
access
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for
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to
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it
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us
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 is truly a huge quantity
so
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, so
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 it will be enough for us
but
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, but
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 we should use it with
rise
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care
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 and without wasting it . The
water
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 is a basic right for everyone
so
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, so
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 it should be charge for free around the world. It will
also
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 save time and effort for people because it's free and will be available most of the
time
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time,
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because
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since
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 it will not be a
role
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burden
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 for people
as long
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apply
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as it was . In conclusion,
the
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apply
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water
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play
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plays
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 a big role in our
life
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lives
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 and we rely on it.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 the
water
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 is a basic right to everyone
so
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, so
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 it should be
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access
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accessible
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free for
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for free
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the
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to the
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 public
especially
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, especially
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poor
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in poor
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countries
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countries,
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 because they
sufferer
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suffer
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 from dirty
wat
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water
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structure
Plan your ideas before you write and keep one idea per paragraph.
structure
State your view in the intro and restate it in the conclusion.
content
Add more clear examples and explain why they matter.
language
Check spelling, grammar, and word use to avoid miss glas and poor meaning.
content
The writer shows a clear view that water should be free.
structure
There are linking words like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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