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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 line graph illustrates the percentage of the
population
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 which has lived in cities in four Asian
countries
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 over 50
years
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, and it indicates the prediction of future two decades.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
population
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 growth reported an upward trend during that period, and
this
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 trend will continue significantly. In the first twenty
years
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, the
population
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 has increased in towns in all four
countries
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.
However
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, Indonesia had the smallest proportion of urban
population
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, at about 15%, Philippines had the largest
population
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, more than 30%.In the next 20
years
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, it was reported an impressive growth
in
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was reported in
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 the
population
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 of Malaysia,
whereas
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 Thailand showed a small rise in the percentage of the
population
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 the
population
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 in Indonesia
grow
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grew
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 in those
years
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, the
population
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 decreased in Thailand
which
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, which
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 reached the same point in 2010. From 21 to 2020, all
countries
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 experienced an increase
the
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in the
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population
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, and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 was in the first rank. In
future
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the future
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 twenty
years
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, the
population
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 will increase in all four
countries
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, and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 will reach more than 80%.
In contrast
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,
other
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the other
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 three counties will be fewer than 60%. All in all,
it is clear that
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 the
population
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 of all Asian
countries
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 has shown a significant growth, and
this
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 trend will be more
impressively
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impressive
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 in future 20
years
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • population
  • urban
  • cities
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • grow
  • significant
  • compare
  • predictions
  • features
  • country
  • dwellers
  • reflect
  • levels
  • economic
  • development
  • job opportunities
  • living conditions
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