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The charts below show the number of international students in Canada and USA in 2002 and 2003, also the changes of the increase in student population over the two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of international students in Canada and USA in 2002 and 2003, also the changes of the increase in student population over the two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table chart illustrates the
students
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 in four different countries
studied
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who studied
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 in
Canada
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 and
America
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 in 2002 and 2003.
Overall
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, most of them had an increasing trend in 2003.
By contrast
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, the number of
students
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 who came from
India
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studied
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and studied
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 in
America
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 decreased. Chinese
studying
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students
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 in
Canada
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 had a significant upward trend, and the number of
individuals
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students
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 in
India
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 was slightly lower than the previous one.
Moreover
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, the
amount
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number
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 of Chinese
studying
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students studying
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 in
Canada
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 was the highest
group
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apply
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compared to other
countries’
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countries
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apply
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students
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. In terms of
America
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,
students
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 from
India
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 were the biggest class in 2002 and 2003, and the data was different from
Canada
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.
However
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, it is obvious that the change in
India
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, which was the only group that decreased in the two years, had a slight drop.
Furthermore
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, the total international
students
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 in
America
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were
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was
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 higher than
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Canada
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in Canada
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,
then
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 the growth between the two countries had the opposite trend.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, canada, america, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international students
  • percentage increase
  • student population
  • academic year
  • economic impact
  • cultural diversity
  • educational institutions
  • host country
  • enrollment rates
  • fluctuation
  • demographic
  • trend analysis
  • migration patterns
  • tuition fees
  • scholarship programs
  • visa policies
  • higher education
  • cross-border education
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