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The graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates percentages of 4 different types of substances that were recycled in one region over a period of
decade
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a decade
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 .
Overall
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 , the amount of
plastic
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 and
paper
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 has
been
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apply
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increased
gradully
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gradually
,
whereas
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 the metal has
been rose
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risen
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 dramatically .
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in
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In
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 contrast ,
cans
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droppes
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drop
 slightly ,
then
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 climb sharply . In 2000 and
2005
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2005,
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 almost all the
matierals
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materials
 remained roughly unchanged . all of them were quite similar in the first year
with
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, with
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exatcly
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exactly
 10 % for
plastic
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 and around 13 % for
cans
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 , metal
and
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, and
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paper
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 were
approxamitely
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approximately
 the same
with
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, with
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 12 % .
five
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Five
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 years later ,
plastic
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 showed
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a
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slight increase by around 2 % ,
whereas
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cans
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decrease
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decreased
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slightly by around 2% ,
while
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paper
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 rose modestly and reached roughly 17 % ,
while
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 metal increased
substaincially
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substantially
 and reached just under 30 % . Turning to 2010 , huge growth
was happened
Verb problem
occurred
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to
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in
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plastic
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 ,
cans
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 ,
paper
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 and metal . with
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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by
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of
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 around 10% , 20% , 15 % and 12 % respectively

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, paper, cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Recycling rates
  • Type of waste
  • Decade
  • Increase / Decrease
  • Trends
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Significant change
  • Observation
  • Underlying factors
  • Technological influences
  • Environmental impact
  • Societal influence
  • Waste management policies
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