When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

From Yesteryears,
technology
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has soared
for
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its innovation and creativity to the better of human lives.
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,
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in
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many nations, the old-fashioned
skills
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and ways of
life
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become obsolete, and it is tedious to use and preserve
that
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those
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skills
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due to
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the introduction of new
technology
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. I, for one, largely agree with
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stand point
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due to
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the convenience of the new innovation that
provides
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it provides
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to the customer and bringing prosperity into the business sector, claiming that
technology
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will
outdates
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the old traditional
skills
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will
be
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making
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the
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it the
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most appropriate choice.
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with, most of the country spends
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amount of money
for
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on
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the advancement of
the
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apply
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technology
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so that it could help people to live a better
life
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. The introduction of smartphones and
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the internets
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internets
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internet
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now
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has now
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become a norm for online
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trends
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,
such
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as online shopping and grocery
which
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, which
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is
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are
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disrupting the traditional way
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of buying
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things.
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,
Majority
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the Majority
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of folks
prefers
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prefer
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to buy
electronices
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electronics
or home appliances through
amazon
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Amazon
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, which is the largest e-commerce platform.
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improvement in shopping had saved lots of time, and
also
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provided
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comfort with security by avoiding
cumbersome
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the cumbersome
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struggle to go out in search of the items at the shop.
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,
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the Old
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tradition of going to the store and spending countless hours is
been
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sharply declining
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the
welcoming
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advent
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of
the
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apply
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technology
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.
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,
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innovation is
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drastic change in
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the cooperate
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sector
especially
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in management and data entry level, where people can use AI and modern software, in order to perform the task more effectively and efficiently. The freshers, especially, are
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changes in the old pattern of doing
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task
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not only helps the company to grow but
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make
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makes
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them capable of handling difficult
task
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tasks
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by
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with
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creative and innovative
idea
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ideas
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.
This
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can be seen when the data entry work can be done by using
python
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Python
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langauage
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language
which
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, which
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can be more effective than writing it manually
which
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, which
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was
traditional
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the traditional
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way where senior
empolyees
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employees
usually do.
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, trends
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have
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been changed and
techology
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technology
is
reeling over
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revolutionising
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around the cooperate sector.
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,
Because
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because
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of the introduction of new
technology
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, the traditional
skills
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and ways of
life
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become pointless, and it is boring to use and conserve
that
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those
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skills
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as
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apply
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in many nations. I believe that
technology
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can play a huge role in the betterment of human
life
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,
as well as
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for the nation and people should learn to
adapat
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adapt
with the change by
disgarding
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disregarding
the old ways of
life
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style.

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Structure
Be clear about your view in the first paragraph and say it in one line.
Structure
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Start with a clear topic sentence.
Content
Give a direct answer to the question in the opening and again in the conclusion.
Language
Use simple, correct grammar. Short, plain sentences are better.
Language
Check spelling and use common words so readers can follow easily.
General
You show a view and try to support it with some examples.
Idea
You mention modern tech like online shopping as a change in life.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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