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The graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph depicts the proportion of the various types of rubbish, mainly
plastic
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,
can
Correct subject-verb agreement
cans
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,
paper
Use synonyms
, and metal, that were processed in an urban area from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
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, it can be said that over the period, there is an increased recycling rate on all four categories of waste, but metal saw a significant rise. In 2000, the percentage of recycling rate was similar in metal, can, and
paper
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,
accounted
Wrong verb form
accounting
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 for 12%, but
plastic
Use synonyms
 was
lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
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 in all four
about
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, about
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 10%. Metal reclaiming value rose to 30% in 2005. In comparison,
paper
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 and
plastic
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 increased 5% points and 2% points, respectively,
while
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 can saw a slight decrease and remained at 10%.
In contrast
Linking Words
, in the year 2010,
metal
Correct article usage
the metal
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recycle
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recycling
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 rate reached
to
Change preposition
apply
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40%,
while
Linking Words
paper
Use synonyms
 saw a slight decrease of about 10%. In comparison, cans grew a significant increase
about
Change preposition
of about
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 10% and
plastic
Use synonyms
 experienced
slight
Correct article usage
a slight
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 decrease
around
Change preposition
of around
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 10%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, paper with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Recycling rates
  • Type of waste
  • Decade
  • Increase / Decrease
  • Trends
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Significant change
  • Observation
  • Underlying factors
  • Technological influences
  • Environmental impact
  • Societal influence
  • Waste management policies
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