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some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenager at the school.To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It is believed by some educators that the global student exchange program is beneficial for teenager's
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, some argue that
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 the disadvantages outweigh
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 concept. I completely disagree with
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 view and strongly believe studying overseas for short periods of time has lots to offer.
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, studying overseas offer
students
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 to learn different language
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 culture at the same time in a very practical way. When
students
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 travel to another land, they learn how to communicate effectively in various languages.
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 helps them to enrich their speaking and listening skills.
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 recent study shows that
students
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 who travelled and
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 with people in a different country can speak French more fluently than others who did not. The exposure not only boosts their confidence but
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 makes them more effective in communicating with others.
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, one major benefit
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 studying abroad is personal growth.
Students
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 become more independent, self-reliant, disciplined and organised
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 away from home.

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structure
Plan your idea in a clear plan. You can say that you will talk about two good points, then give a small talk about the bad side and end with your view.
structure
Add a short final part. Restate your view and the main reason why you think the good side win.
paragraphing
Make each paragraph about one idea. Start with a light sentence that tells the point, then add a simple example.
examples
Give clear and small examples. For example, say 'three months abroad' and 'a short trip to a new town' to show ideas.
grammar
Fix grammar mistakes. Use easy form. Use 'offers' with 'study overseas' and keep to short, plain sentences.
cohesion
Use joining words like 'also', 'but', 'for example', to link ideas and move from one idea to the next.
lexical
Keep to simple word choice from the top 100 list. This keeps a clear voice and helps with score.
stance
You take a clear stand that you see the good side of study abroad.
content
You give two clear points that show what a pupil can gain from study overseas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exchange
  • visit
  • teenager
  • school
  • benefit
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • cost
  • money
  • time
  • risk
  • safety
  • homesick
  • culture
  • language
  • speak
  • listen
  • confidence
  • independence
  • open mind
  • friend
  • respect
  • global view
  • study
  • future
  • career
  • plan
  • prep
  • host family
  • supervisor
  • policy
  • balance
  • outweigh
  • extent
  • education
  • communication
  • support
  • decision
  • guidance
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