Social Media has helped us increase our virtual networks. This has isolated us physically, making us socially awkward in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

In my opinion, social
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makes us socially awkward
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and isolates us from each other. It causes fear to talk with other people in real life, makes our
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more foolish and distracts us from more important things. Social
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makes us get used to gadget screens, and we want to watch on
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screen again and again. It’s a pretty serious problem in our generation, and we have to make any changes in our lives. First of all, we have to try to distract each other from social
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, like invite to go outside and spend time with friends or something else. I remember when my brothers were playing video games on their gadgets, I started distracting them and gave them advice to go outside and spend time together. But it can’t always work, and sometimes we have to be more creative and persistent in similar situations. If you want to distract your acquaintances from social
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, just try to distract them with something more productive and interesting for them. The main
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the health of people. Gadgets make their back crooked, make their vision worse than usual and make their brain rot.
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, it makes us more closed in ourselves and we don’t want to speak with people in real life. That’s why we shouldn’t use social
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so much, or else.

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Task
State your view clearly in the first paragraph. Say how much you agree or disagree.
Task
Add more strong examples from life or data to back up points.
Coherence
End with a short conclusion that restates your view.
Coherence
Use topic sentences for each paragraph and link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'so'.
Language
Check for small grammar errors and use plain words.
Idea
Clear view that social media can harm real talk.
Evidence
Uses a real life example.
Fully explain your ideas

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connect
  • online
  • offline
  • face-to-face
  • real life
  • social
  • media
  • networks
  • relationships
  • awkward
  • shy
  • confident
  • increase
  • decrease
  • benefit
  • drawback
  • active
  • passive
  • interaction
  • habit
  • balance
  • practice
  • communication
  • support
  • community
  • time
  • meetup
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