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Some people believe that it is cruel to test drugs and other new products on animals. Others believe that this sort of testing is important and necessary for improving and even saving people’s lives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many members of
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society believe that injecting
animals
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 with drugs and other
products
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 is wrong. Meanwhile, others think that
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 action is necessary for human lives. Both can raise great points.
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, I stand with the people who find
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 treatment understandable. Mainly because we are not able to try it on human beings, and there are no other
choises
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choices
.
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 can be a very sensitive topic for many individuals.
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, they might disagree with others. There
are
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 no other solution. Using these
kind
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 of
products
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 before testing them in hospitals can
resault
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result
 in a bigger issue. People can get side effects or
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 more sick from those untested
products
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. Many who find
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 wrong and cruel should look for new technologies and possibly solve
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 problem. I believe that we can find new methods with these new technology tools. There are many videos online
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 how
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 can affect
generation
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the generation
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 of
animals
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 like rabbits, rats, and
monkey
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. Because they are the
most
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 3 commonly used
animals
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 in these experiences. In conclusion,
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 was a very
sensetive
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sensitive
 topic for a long amount of time.
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 one day we can find a better way to deal with drugs and
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products
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 testing. Alternatives are possible with new technologies nowadays.
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,
animals
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 deserve to be treated better. But
,
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 we have to continue with
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 approach until we find another solution.

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structure
Plan your answer. Start with what you think and then say what others think. Then add your own view at the end.
structure
Make a clear intro that states the topic and your view. End with a short, clear conclusion.
content
Give two or three main ideas for each side. Then add one or two strong points to back up your view.
language
Use simple linking words like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example' to join ideas.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use correct word form and avoid long, tricky sentences.
content
Use a specific example that shows your point and is easy to see in real life.
structure
Finish with a short, clear conclusion that restates your view.
content
The writer tries to discuss both sides of the issue.
content
The writer does state a view.
language
There is some use of linking words and a concluding remark.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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