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The governments shoild give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on ,even if they are not unemployed. To whhat extent do you agree or disagree?

There is
on
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going
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 discussion that
the
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policymakers
are
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ought to grant a standard
wages
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wage
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 to every
citizens
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citizen
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 of the nation, which includes both workers and
non- workers
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non-workers
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. I, for one, strongly disagree with
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this
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these
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stand points
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due to
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 the burden on the
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governement
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government
 and leading to
lack
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a lack
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 of motivation to pursue
the
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a
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life
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, and welcoming poor lifestyles.
This
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 essay will outline why
administration
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the administration
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 should not give
money
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 to every citizen
?
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.
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To begin
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,
Paying
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paying
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 income to every
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individuals
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individual
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 can be
troublesome
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a troublesome
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 task for
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the governement
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governement
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government
, especially
to
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for
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 the
youths
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youth
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.
This
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 is because policy makers mainly depend on taxes, which are paid by locals, and
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this
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these
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 funds are used for the betterment of the country,
such
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 as building new infrastructures or paying
pension
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pensions
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 to senior citizens. If
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the governement
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governement
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government
 starts distributing the funds to common
people
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, they will run out of cash.
As a result
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, it will lead to poor
economy
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 growth and development. Administration,
therefore
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, should hand out the
money
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 only to retirees or older
people
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 rather than giving
to
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it to
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 every
citizens
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citizen
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.
Furthermore
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, handing out
money
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 to all the
individuals
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 can make them
coach
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couch
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 potatoes.
This
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 is because it meltdowns the motivation towards work and
make
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makes
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 them lazy to do even daily chores
due to
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 the liberty of
monetry
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monetary
 funding given
be
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by
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 administrations.
Hence
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, leading to a
sedantary
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sedentary
 lifestyle.
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, during the pandemic of
corona virus
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, every
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individuals
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individual
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 was paid bi-weekly, regardless of working or
non- working
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non-working
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, which covered their wants and needs. So, most of the
people
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 got into
comfort
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a comfort
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 zone, and
onces
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once
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been
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 removed, most of the
individuals
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 were struggling to adjust
with
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to
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normal
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a normal
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 lifestyle.
Consequently
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, leading to the distraction of
purpose
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the purpose
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 of human
life
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 and
wander
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wandering aimlessly
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 the
life
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aimlessely
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apply
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.
To conclude
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, if policymakers are giving
a
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apply
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standard wages to every citizen of the nation, which includes both
employeed
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employed
 and
non- employeed
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non-employed
, it will instil pressure on exchequers and could make the
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life
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lives
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 of
people
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aimlessely
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aimless
 because of not having any purpose in
life
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. I believe that youth should go
work
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to work
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, regardless of
fund
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funds
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 given by
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the governement
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governement
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government
, and
government
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the government
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 should give
money
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 only to older
citizen
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citizens
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 or retirees, and
make
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allocate
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 tax funds
in
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for
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 the development of
nation
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the nation
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.

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