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Some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue tht it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Life is not predictable; as John Lennon once said'Life is what happens when you're busy making other plans.' Nobody can control their entire existence, even though individuals are responsible
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 their own actions, there may be issues on the road that could not be expected ahead of time.
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 common belief, the only way to live with an unwanted condition is to admit it.
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, others argue that a bad situation is supposed to be handled by making progress and taking action.
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, ıt is sometimes quite difficult to face challenging circumstances. Human beings are not naturally destined for complex systems
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 the expectations aren't satisfied in today's advanced world. Hundreds of years ago, people were hunting for food,
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 nowadays they’re expected to work extremely long hours
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 skills
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 as problem solving, leadership, and self-confidence are hard to obtain. It is natural that some people feel disoriented;
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, it should not always be considered necessary to fight against underachievements.
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, there is no doubt that a number of people have ambitions to pursue despite failure. In the modern era, it seems that forcing things often leads to better outcomes.
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, if a student receives a rejection letter from a higher education
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 they are encouraged to apply again to demonstrate their motivation to study there.
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 retries in order to improve the results.
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, a problem can be handled
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 when it comes to failure. What matters most is maintaining a
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 mindset, knowing when to accept circumstances and when to take action for
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 since both approaches are necessary for
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 life.

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task
Make your view clear in the introduction and end with a strong personal opinion.
coherence
Use a clear topic sentence at the start of each paragraph and connect ideas with simple linking words.
examples
Give one clear example for each point and explain how it supports your view.
content
You discuss both sides of the topic.
structure
You begin with a general idea about life and plans.
language
There is a wish to explain when to act and when to accept.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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