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Some people fail at school but end up being successful in life. Who do you think so? What are the most important things to succeed?

Many individuals do not succeed in academic learning.
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, they end up doing well in their
future
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. I really find that possible. Mainly because
future
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 jobs do not ask for
school
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knowladge
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knowledge
. The most
importnant
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important
 way to find success is consistency, good communication skills, and
willing
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 to learn. Many
business men
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businessmen
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 have
build
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built
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 their
fourtne
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fortune
 threw friends and other people.
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having
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, having
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 great communication
skill
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skills
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 and persuasion methods
,
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apply
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 can get you
future
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 opportunities
of
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for
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 wealth. Having a
potential
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 great business idea does not have to do with
school
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 subject
knowladge
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knowledge
. You can look for other employees to deal with the numbers. Having a high degree
certifiacate
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certificate
 can surely help you manage your
future
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.
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, it does not mean you can't make it without it. There are many other aspects of
sucsess
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success
. Obviously
having
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, having
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 high grades in
school
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 is one of them. But
,
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apply
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 you should focus on other skills as well. An essential one is being
consistant
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consistent
. Having that in your bag
,
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apply
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 can boost every aspect of your
future
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 life, job, and hobbies. So many talented individuals get
behind
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left behind
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 if they are not as consistent as others.
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, nearly all
profissonal athleates
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professional athletes
 are at that high level and success.
is
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 because of consistency
,
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apply
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 and determination. In conclusion, yes, having
this
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 type of
knowladge
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knowledge
 and
high level
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high-level
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 degrees in
school
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,
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apply
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 can be beneficial in your career.
However
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, not all careers mainly depend on them. Having other
type
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types
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 of skills might be enough to get ahead of others.

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task
Plan your answer first. State your view on who can be successful, then give 2–3 ideas and a short ending. This helps the reader see your main point.
coherence
Make one idea per paragraph. Use simple links like and, but, also, so to join ideas. This makes the text easy to read.
language
Watch spelling and grammar. Use short, plain sentences. Fix common errors that hide meaning.
examples
Give clear examples for each idea. Right now you state ideas but add less detail. A small example helps.
idea
You give a clear view that success can come from things other than school.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence
Link words are used to connect some ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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