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The graph below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980

The graph below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980
The bar chart compares the
numbers
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number
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 of prison inmates in five developed countries from 1930 to 1980.
From the
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The
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 graph
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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it
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apply
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shows that all countries have
fluctuative
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fluctuating
 figures in fifty years.
However
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, only
The
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apply
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Great Britain has
constant
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a constant
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 increase.
For instance
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, starting from about thirty persons in 1930 and 1940, the figure
raise
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rose
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 and
reach
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reached
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highest
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its highest
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 number in 1980, which
has
Verb problem
was
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 85
prisoner
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prisoners
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 half
century
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a century
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after
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later
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. Aside from that,
The
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the
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 United States have
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
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 number
for
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of
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imprisonment
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imprisonments
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 and
reach
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reached
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 the highest number in 1980 among all countries from 1930 to 1980. The same trend happened previously
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while
Punctuation problem
, while
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 the US
also
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has
Wrong verb form
had
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highest
Correct article usage
the highest
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 figures in 1940, 1960, and 1970.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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