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15.The three pie charts show the production and consumption of tea and where the profit goes around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

15.The three pie charts show the production and consumption of tea and where the profit goes around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The three pie charts illustrate the
production
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 and drinking of
tea
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 and where the profit goes around the world.
Overall
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, all tend to have distinct trends between the charts given. The Highest
Tea
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Production
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 is by South Africa, with a total of 35%,
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highest
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tea
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 consumer was by the Europeans with 50%.
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, Delivery has the most Profits globally with 50%.
To begin
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 with, the second largest
Tea
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 Producer is Indonesia with 25%, close by Japan with 22%, and
lastly
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 Vietnam with the lowest
production
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 at 18%.
In addition
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, America has the second-highest
Tea
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 Consumption at 35%.
Whereas
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 Japan has the lowest
Tea
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 Consumption with 5%, and others with 10%.
Furthermore
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, Retailers' profit was half of the delivery with 25%, and Exporters profited with 11%.
Finally
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, Producers, close to Exporters with 10%, and
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 profits were the lowest among them with 4%.
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, Japan had the 3rd highest
Tea
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Production
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 with 22%, was the lowest
Tea
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 Consumption by 5%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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