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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three region of the world during the 1990's

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three region of the world during the 1990's
The pie chart gives the information about the five main factors that
give
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negative
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a negative
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 impact
to
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 decreasing the productivity of agricultural areas,
while
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 the table illustrates the effects of
land
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degrardation
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degradation
 on three places, including North America, Europe, and Oceania.
Overall
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, it
clearly can be
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can be clearly
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 seen
form
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 the pie chart that
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over-grazing was the major problem for
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land
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 degradation,
whereas
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 the biggest damage caused by these factors
experienced
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was experienced
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by
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in
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the Europe
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Europe
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European
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 region. In 1990, the over-grazing shared the biggest proportion with around 35% which
responsible
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was responsible
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 for the
land
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 degradation. It
followed
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 by deforestation with approximately 30%.
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, the over-cultivation shared
slighlty
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slightly
 below with around 28%. Meanwhile, there were other
factor
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factors
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 that
also
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gave
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the
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a
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 negative impact for lessen
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apply
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productivity in
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agricultural
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agriculture
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 which
taken
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accounting
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 a percentages about 7%.
Furthermore
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, the huge damage of
land
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 degradation was experienced
on
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in
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the
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Europe, reaching 23%.
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,
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Oceania experienced
with
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13%, but
theover-cultivation
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over-cultivation
 did not exist anymore in
this
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 area. In
constrast
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contrast
,
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North America had the lowest percentages with only 5%
in
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on
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 average.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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