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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
The line chart illustrates the number of
shops
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 that have been out of business
along with
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 the opened
stores
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 in a country, from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, it is evident that both of the
shops
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 that have either been shut down or
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remain unclosed
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unclosed
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closed
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 displayed a downward trend.
Moreover
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, there was a sharp decline in the
stores
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 that opened. Eventually,
shops
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 that have been in business remained unchanged at some point. After the beginning of the period,
stores
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 that had been closed experienced some fluctuations for over four years. until the trend reached just over 63 thousand
shops
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 in 2014.
Furthermore
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, these
stores
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 displayed a drop, which demonstrates that most of the
shops
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 closed in the year 2015.
However
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, the number rose again to more than five times, reaching 5000. Unclosed
stores
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 fell rapidly to nearly half in the first year after reaching their peak.
In contrast
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, the figure increased substantially in the second year by 2000 more than in business
stores
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. Between 2015 and 2016, the trend stayed
conistent
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consistent
 at 4 thousand.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "displayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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