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The number of students going overseas to study is getting higher.Do you think this phenomenon have more advantages than disadvantages?

In essence, the authors note that the loss of AR in LebRb neurons left body mass, glucose, and puberty much the same
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 aided fertility. The mice had more regular cycles and healthier ovaries, and the authors wrote that
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 recovery likely came after birth, when AR signals fell silent. Losing these signals blunted some effects of prenatal androgen exposure. So, the study shows that AR in LepRb cells ties excess androgen to the loss of cycles, and that the neural circuits for puberty and for female cyclicity lie apart in the brain.

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Start with a clear aim. State what you will say about the essay.
coherence
Use good link words to show how ideas go from one to the next.
coherence
Give more detail and more steps to show how the study works, with a small plan in the text.
task
It gives the main facts of the study in a simple way.
coherence
Ideas are easy to find and the link words help flow.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • cultural awareness
  • language proficiency
  • career opportunities
  • international education
  • resume
  • adaptable
  • resourceful
  • educational experience
  • personal growth
  • independence
  • navigate
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