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Band 3.5

Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the present era, travelling has increased
significatly
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significantly
 in everybody's life, as compared to the past.
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 essay will delineate the positives and reasons behind the given trend. There are several reasons to commute, the
prepondrant
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predominant
 one is
work
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.
Everyday
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, many
people
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 leave their homes to earn a living, because of
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this
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this,
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 they
require
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need
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 to travel from one place to another. Recently,
for instance
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, Dua Lipa
who
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, who
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 is an American music
artist
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artist,
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 visited London to perform a concert there. Apart from that,
people
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 even travel to get
education
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an education
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. They go to school and colleges which are in another city or sometimes in other countries to get a specialised education. Moving forward, there are multiple advantages of
traveling
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travelling
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, the primary one
would be
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being
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exploration of the
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the exploration of
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 new
places
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. Individuals go to new cities and nations for their
work
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,
they
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and they
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 get to see and experience many new things. Many Canadian companies,
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, offer
work
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 to their employees in Paris or other European countries.
This
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 way,
people
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 working for them get to enjoy new culture,
variety
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a variety
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 of food, and beautiful
places
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.
In addition
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, commutation to new
places
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open
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opens
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 doors for new opportunities for career, business, and even for finding a life partner. To recapitulate,
however
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travelling
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, travelling
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 has become a necessity for everyone as
people
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 go out to
work
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, study,
to
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apply
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visit their loved ones, and so on.
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, it gives
grater
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greater
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 benefits to all: new opportunities, exploring new
places
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,
get
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getting
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 to know different cultures, and so on.

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task
Start with one main idea in each big part. Use a short line to say what you will talk about.
task
Give small and clear ideas. Use real and simple examples from daily life.
coherence
Link ideas with easy links like also, and, but, for example.
coherence
Keep sentences short. Do not put many ideas in one long line.
strength
The essay tries to talk about both parts: why travel grows and what you gain.
strength
There is a start and end that show the plan of the write up.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancements
  • transportation technology
  • budget airlines
  • airfare
  • globalization
  • interconnected
  • cultural exchange
  • monotony
  • personal growth
  • open-mindedness
  • adaptability
  • immersion
  • experiential learning
  • global awareness
  • firsthand knowledge
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