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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

The
two
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 maps compare the present layout of a university’s
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sport
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sports
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center
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 with future plans.
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, it can be clearly seen that the
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sport
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center
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 is going to be larger.
In addition
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, more areas for different activities will be added.
Initially
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, at the moment, the university
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sport
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sports
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 facility has three buildings: the main campus and
two
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 smaller outdoor courts in the corners. So, there is a reception area
in
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on
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 the south
side
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. The main building has three rooms: the changing room
in
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 the left
side
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, the seating zone
in
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 the right, and the gym
in
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 the north
side
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. And there is a huge 25m pool in the middle of the campus
which
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, which
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 has
the
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an
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 entrance for
changing
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a changing
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 room. Meanwhile, the future plans for
university
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the university
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sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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 are more intriguing. First of all, areas from the main building at the moment are going to be the same, but the gym is going to be larger. From the main entrance, there will be a small cafe
from
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 the right
side
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 and the sports shop
from
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 the left.
Furthermore
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, there
is
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are
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 going to be
two
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 more changing rooms which
would
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 located in the southwest and southern parts. As
map
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the map
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 shows, there will be
on
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one
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 huge leisure pool in the left corner.
Moreover
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,
two
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 dance studios will be added in the right corner.

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structure
Make a clear plan at the start and end. A short line on how the map changes.
grammar
Fix bad grammar. For example: would located -> would be located; one huge pool -> one huge pool; map shows -> map shows (as the map shows).
vocabulary
Use the same name for the place all through.
coherence
Be exact with place words: north, south, left, right, corners.
grammar
Break long sentences into short ones. Use fewer commas.
content
Add more exact details about changes, like how many new areas and where they sit.
content
There is a short overview at the start.
language
Worth use of future form and present form to show the change.
detail
The text names some new parts like cafe and pool.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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