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Band 4.5

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment. Only large companies and governments can make a difference. What extent do you agree or disagree.

There is nothing individuals can do to make the
enviorment
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environment
 better. The only ones who have an
impact
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 are large
companies
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 and governments. Even though some people definitely agree with the given opinion, others may absolutely disagree with it.
Firstly
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, massive changes are not the only ones
who
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that
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 can have a significant
impact
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 on the
enviroment
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environment
.
For instance
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, by choosing to drive
publick
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public
 transport
on
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in
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daily
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your daily
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 habits, you are already reducing the amount of carbon dioxide
that is
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 being
relased
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released
 in the atmosphere. There are about 40 seats in a regular bus,
hence
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 40 individuals
are putting
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 a big
impact
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 on making our world a better place.
Secondly
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, by choosing to use no-plastic packaging, society can
also
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, clearly, make a big
impact
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 on our
enviroment
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environment
. As there
has
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have
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 been many cases where turtles were killed by plastic
starws
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stars
 and oceans
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are poluted
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poluted
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polluted
 with plastic bags, it is significantly important
to conclude
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 where your
thrown away
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 trash is going to end up.
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, another point to consider is the
impact
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 that large
companies
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 and
governmentscan
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governments can
 have on
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the ecosistem
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ecosistem
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ecosystem
. One clear example is, again, these
not enviromently
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non-environmentally
 friendly packagings,
who
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which
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 are produced by large
companies
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. If
government
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the government
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prohibids
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prohibits
 the use of plastic in containers and
companies
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 stop
to produce
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producing
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 it, the
provblem
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problem
 can be solved more effectively.
As a result
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, people will have no
choise
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choice
 but to use eco wraps.
To conclude
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, I agree that some individuals might have a much bigger
impact
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 on slowing down
the
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apply
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global warming, but if everyone puts a slight effort
on
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into
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 making some changes in their daily lifestyle, society will be as important as the government.

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grammar
Fix big spelling and make words clear so it is easy to read.
structure
Have a short intro that states your view and a clear ending that restates it.
vocabulary
Use simple, correct words for key ideas like environment, plastic, emissions.
structure
Try shorter and simpler sentences to make ideas easy to follow.
conclusion
The writer shows a clear position at the end.
cohesion
Link words like First, Second, Third help the flow.
content
Examples are used to back ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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