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Band 2

In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important. *why might this be the case *Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Having your private property is many people dream
,
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I believe that having your house is
great
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 advantage and will help in securing your future. When people focus
in
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 buying
houses
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this
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 will motivate them to work harder and make sure they have
saving
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 to achieve
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 goal.
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example
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In
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 my
country
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country,
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 all
man
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men
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 have to buy a land and build it for the family in order to secure their
children
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children's
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feature
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future
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and
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 if by any chance something happens to the family
provider
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 they will have a roof on the top of their heads . The positive impact of buying a home goes beyond what we think.
Itcan
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It can
 increase the economic value of the properties in the country and
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attracts
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 foreign investments in real estate .As we have witnessed over a decade that investing in
estate
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real estate
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 is a great way to grow your money as home
value
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values
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 will rise in the
feature
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future
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.
Futhermore
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 will achieve personal and family security. In
the light of
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 above, having your private property is
great
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a great
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 way to secure
your self
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 and comes with huge benefits
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however
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,not
every one
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everyone
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 can achieve
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 at
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 age of time.

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. Use a clear intro, 2 main ideas, then a short conclusion.
language
Use simple, correct grammar. Check verb form and plural nouns.
content
Add more full reasons and connect them to your view on owning a home.
content
Provide more examples to show your points are true.
content
You show a clear view that owning a home can be good.
structure
You try to use ideas and some example to back your view.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • owning
  • home
  • rent
  • buy
  • loan
  • save
  • money
  • price
  • debt
  • cost
  • work
  • move
  • job
  • family
  • security
  • future
  • stability
  • control
  • pride
  • culture
  • tradition
  • status
  • area
  • home price
  • home value
  • benefit
  • disadvantage
  • balance
  • view
  • choice
  • option
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