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The rising cost and decreasing supply of fossil fuels such as oils and gas along with environmental concern, means that their continued use as our main source of energy is impractical and alternative sources must be found. The only realistic alternative is nuclear energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons and relevant examples for your answer.

Nuclear
energy
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 is the only substitute at the current time, with the increase in demand and the reduction in the reservoir of fossil fuels. I agree to a great extent, and the essay below will explicate my intellect. First and foremost, nuclear
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 is the cleanest source of
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 because the byproduct of
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energy
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 is only steam,
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 the pollution related to fossil fuels generates a great amount of sulphur
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 the presence of sulphuric impurities in it, which
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 causes sulphuric rain. The
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 generated using nuclear
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 will not require any additional means of transportation, because it can use the same medium which are being used at
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 moment.
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, France is using around 70% of electricity acquired from nuclear power plants to sustain their electricity consumption.
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, there are some hazardous effects of nuclear power plants, like the maintenance costs being really high, and they need to be built far away from residential areas
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 the risk of radiation in the event of failure.
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, the Chernobyl incident happened
few
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 decades back, but radiation levels are so high, it is still not habitable. In conclusion, even after
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 drawbacks, nuclear
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 is the only source that can sustain our
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 requirements,
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 we can focus on developing other means of fuel or power options.

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task
Start with a clear view in the first paragraph and keep it in all the essay.
content
Give both sides: the good and bad of nuclear energy. Say why you still choose it.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea with a small sentence at the start that tells the idea.
grammar
Check the facts and use plain words. Note that nuclear energy does not only give steam as a by product.
content
The writer shows a clear position.
example
The essay uses a real country example to support a point.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fossil fuels
  • Impractical
  • Alternative sources
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Sustainable
  • Nonrenewable
  • Carbon emissions
  • Radioactive waste
  • Meltdown
  • Cost-effective
  • Investment
  • Power plants
  • Grid
  • Dependence
  • Infrastructure
  • Safety measures
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