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Writing Samples
Band 2

It will be better to have wide use of driverless cars for individuals and society . To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement？

It increases
possibility
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the possibility
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for
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of
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 personal
unsafety
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safety
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.Primarily, technology
company
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companies
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 launched those
driverless
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cars
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 not very long
and
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ago and
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not
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are not
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 100
percent
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per cent
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 reliable.
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,it poses a potential threat to human life
,
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;
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to exaggerate a bit, even
minor
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a minor
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 program error can lead to
unimaginable
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an unimaginable
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 catastrophe.
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,in recent years,news media
often
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report
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reported
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 incidents related to
driverless
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cars
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 that hit the barrier on
roadside
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the roadside
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 .
As a result
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,passengers in the car suffered different degrees of burning
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. .what’s
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.what’s
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What’s
 worse,it caused write-off of the car and the loss of passengers’
life
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lives
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in some cases. It is conceivable that all types of
driverless
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cars
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 running on the road can be an intractable problem for society to manage.Generally,major cities have boasted well-developed transportation networks accessible
with
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by
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 train,tram,buses and numerous private
cars
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.But every coin has two sides,the unfavourable side is the
complicate
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complicated
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 travel route that creates a tough problem to manage various means of travelling .
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,widespread use of
driverless
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cars
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 can bring a
proliferate
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proliferating
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 demand .
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,multiple transportation and
sharp
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a sharp
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 increase
of
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in
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driverless
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cars
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 doubled the problem which
need
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needs
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 to be solved by our society.

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task response
Make your stance clear in the first paragraph. Say if you agree or disagree and how strong your view is.
structure
Plan your essay with four parts: intro, 2 body paragraphs, and a short conclusion. Each body has one main idea with a simple example.
coherence
Use simple linking words to connect ideas: also, but, because, for example.
language
Check grammar and spellings. Fix mistakes like missing spaces and wrong punctuation.
content
The writer shows a real worry about safety.
content
You try to use examples from life.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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