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Band 4

Many people nowadays donot feel safe either they are at home or go out. What are the reason? what can wo do to solve this problem.

Nowadays
Punctuation problem
Nowadays,
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 there are many conflicts between countries which result in people
faced abondoned
Verb problem
abandoning
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 their homes,
lifes
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lives
 or loved ones. Even
Linking Words
this
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though this
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 may be perceived that it is good way out, but sometimes is really risky for people who
lives
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live
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 in stable condition
teritories
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territories
. İrregular
migrant
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migrants
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 or people who
previously
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are previously
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 involved in crime escape from their
contries
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countries
 to new desired countries.

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grammar
Fix spelling and basic grammar so the text is easy to read.
structure
Make a short plan: start with a view, then give two or three ideas, then finish with a simple ending.
vocabulary
Use simple but correct words. Avoid long or hard words.
ideas
Give examples to show your point, even small ones like a common event or fact.
coherence
Use some linking words to join ideas, so sentences flow better.
content
The topic is clear and it can be a good point to write about.
content
Some ideas about migrants and risk are present.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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